Beti
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kityekdaa RMDchee kawitahee tyat moDate... Asamya, surekh description!
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Shriramb
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| | Saturday, May 11, 2002 - 4:39 am: |
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asami,
mala nahee vaTat ki "muktachchhand" ha ek kaavyaprakaar mhaNoon hataLaNyaas kaThiN aahe. ya kavyaprakaarat koNateehee bandhane paLaNyaachee garaj nasalyamuLe, kaveelaa aaple vichar vyakta karaNyaache poorNa swatantrya miLate. tu je mhaNatoyas ki muktachchhandaat dekhil ek prakaarchee lay asate, tee lay pratyek veLi asatech ase nahee, aaNi jevha asate tevha tee tyaa kaveene jaNun-bujun (kadaachit kavita agadich gadya vaaTu naye mhaNoon) nirmaN kelelee asate.
muktachchhand mhaNaje kaheehee aaNi kasehee lihile taree chaalate haa samajahee chukeecha aahe.
mazya mate muktachchhandaache vyavachchhedak lakshaNa mhaNaje tyaat vRutta chhand ityadee vyakaraNeeya aakruteebandhaanpekshaa kavitechayaa aashayaalaa dile gelele mahatva.
kaay vaaTate tumhalaa?
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Asami, Beti aaNi Shriramb : mukta chhandabaddal atishay upatukt mahiti dilyabaddal man:poorvak aabhar!
Beti : ithalya sagaLya kawita mee baRyachada punha punha vachato. Tika kuThe karato aahe ga mee? mukt chhandateel kavyala jar kamee lekhale asate tar Tika zalee asatee. aaNi tu sangitalelee kavinchee nave mazya matapramaNe juNe kavee aahet. Saumitranchya kawita mala muktachhandat jaNavataat. Aso.. dive !!!
chu. bhoo. dhya. ghya.!
Asami : arey to Peshawa kawita chhan lihito paN arth sangaNyasaThee far kanjuSh aahe. mala nahee aawaDale! swatachyach kawitecha arth na sangayala paN kahi karaNe asayala pahije kaa? mag kawitach kashala karayachya? swatach lihoon swatach vachavyat mhaNaje itar kuNee arth vicharaNar nahee.
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Beti
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| | Monday, May 13, 2002 - 2:29 am: |
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Soumitrachee gANee tulA muktchchhandee wATtAt?? mag sarwch theek Ahe...
AruNataee, Chango, Ilahee jamAdar he june kawee asateel tar 'nawya'na pALanyat kawitA karawyA lagteel--- 
aso tuzya mate naween asalelyA kaweenchee aNi tyanchya kaawyasangrahanchee naawe sang..mala wachayala hawe tyanche saahitya...
itar naawe ajoon kawya-rat asalyaMuLe dilee-- tynchee sadhyachee kawitaa wartamankaleen nahee ka? kawee juna asala taree tyachee kawita badalate... aso haa wadacha mudda ahe. so i would stop here about it!
malA itakech mhaNayache Ahe ki sarsakat widhane kartAnA ApalA sadyakaleen kawitechA abhyas nidaan wAchan hawe. te kAhee mAze faarse nAhee. taree mee maze mhaNane udaharaNe deoon sangitale. jyache wachan-chintan asel tyne widhAne karAweet paN mag nidaan magitaleyawar taree spaSteekaraN karAwe udAharaNasahit.
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aso tuzya mate naween asalelyA kaweenchee aNi tyanchya kaawyasangrahanchee naawe sang..mala wachayala hawe tyanche saahitya... >> Swati keLakar,Peshawe, Satyajeet, RMD.. hyanchya kawita tu wach! tya muktachhandat aahet (bahuda)
nahi ga Beti, mala nahi mahiti naween kawinche nave. paN tuze posting far kaDak DhaDak waTale. paN rag ajibat nahi aala. jithe mazee chuk asate tee manya karayachee mazee tayaree asate. ho kadhee sangaNyaarache shabd kaDu vaTale tar vaiT vaTate evhaDech! paN suruwateelach chu. bhoo. dhya. ghya. ase lihile aahe bagh. tenwa tu maza tone lakshat ghyayala hawa hota. aaNi maze kawya wachan maybolipurates maryadeet aahe hehee tula spaShTach sangato. muLatach tula mazya postings cha tone lakShat nahi aala mhaNoon tula maze posting Tikatmak vaTale asawe!
punha ekada 'chu. bhoo. dhya. ghya.'
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Anamikag
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| | Monday, June 24, 2002 - 4:05 pm: |
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aaj pahilyandach mi ha bb pahila. khoopach chaan aahe.
I want to add a few things I know:
dvyarthi shabdane zalelya alankarala shlesh alankar mhanatat.
Ani mukta chandabaddal mala watata ki Asami mhanato te barobar aahe.
mukta chhaand ha adhi ek chhand aahe. chhand mhatala mhanaje geyata kinwa lay hi asalich pahije. hi lay shabdane aleli asel kinwa keval arthane sadhalile asu shakel pan lay hi avashyakach aahe. Nahitar te expression keval alankarik gaddya hoil. tyala kavita mhanata yenar nahee.
one more thing I want to add..
morpantanchya arya mala watata vasantatilaka vruttat yetat... tyache gan:
ja sa ja ya la ga ase aahet.
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Shriramb
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| | Monday, June 24, 2002 - 5:11 pm: |
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maaJyaa mato Aayaa- ho ek maa~a gaNavaR<a Aaho. maa~a gaNavaR<aaMmaQyao AxaraMcyaa saM#yaovar baMQana
nasato. maa~aMvar Asato.
maaJyaa mato KalaIla pV hI ek Aayaa- Aaho. ³caU.BaU.Va.Gyaa.´
sauXlaÜk vaamanaacaa
ABaMgavaaNaI p`isaw tukyaacaI
AÜvaI &anaoXaacaI
tOXaI Aayaa- mayaUrpMtacaI
vasaMtitlakacao gaNa tBajajagaga Aahot.
hÜ vasaMtitlaka tBajaajagaagaI
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Mvelanka
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| | Monday, June 24, 2002 - 7:02 pm: |
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ja sa ja sa ya la ga
ho gaNa pRqvaI vaR<aacao Aahot.
]da.
xaNaÜxaiNa pDo ]zo pir baLo ]Do baapDI È
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Anamikag
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| | Monday, June 24, 2002 - 7:20 pm: |
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mag ja sa ja sa ya la ga he konate vrutta aahe?
shukanyokti ani kekavalitil kahi shlok he yach vruttat aahe. Kekavali moropantanchi asalyamule tyatil pade mhanaje arya aahetasa mala vatat hota.
eg.
dayabda valasheela ka
tari na chataka sevaka
kinva
fale ma|dhura kha|vaya asati ni|tya mveve |tase
hire jadita sundari kanaka panjari hee vase
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swatantra vanavruttichya ghadi ghadi sukhate smare
Anyokti ha hee ek alankar aahe. best example : leki bole sune laage.
Kunala anakhee anyoktya mahit aahe ka ?
pikanyokti, sinhanyokti, suvarnanyokti?
chandanayokti:
ahe ek sugandha matra javali totyas rakhavaya
kaise ghor bhujang palishi jana je dhavati khavaya
yeti god fale fule hi baravi daive tula chandana
tyanchya ba karitos kay nakale sarakhshana yojana
suryanyokti:
hota jovari ambari tapata to chandaunshu teje nije
zala nishprabha tarakadhipatihee bola kashala duje
rahoochya vadanee aji gavasata to bhanu daive aha
kaise shoodrahee kajave chmakati tyachyapudhe te paha.
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Shriramb
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| | Monday, June 24, 2002 - 7:45 pm: |
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XaukanyaÜ>I naavaacaI ek kivata Aamhalaa hÜtI. tI kÜNaacaI hÜtI to Aata Aazvat naahI.
... A%yauccaI pid qaÜrhI ibaGaDtÜ ha baÜla Aaho Kra
hI sauwa saUyaa-nyaÜ>Ica Aaho Asao vaaTto. yaatIla pihlyaa tIna AÜLI kÜNaalaa za}k Aahot kaÆ
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Mvelanka
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| | Monday, June 24, 2002 - 8:04 pm: |
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doKÜnaI ]dyaa tuJyaa iWjakulao jaatI AtI hYau-naI È
XaadU-laaidk sava- duYT dDtI igaya-MtrI jaa]naI ÈÈ
doXaI tap prI jasaa vairvarI yaoXaI naBaI Baaskra È
A%yauccaI pid qaÜrhI ibaGaDtÜ ha baÜla Aaho Kra ÈÈ
ÌYNaXaas~I icapLUNakr
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Jay
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| | Monday, July 08, 2002 - 5:53 am: |
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ima~aMnaÜ
malaa dhavaIcyaa AByaasaat Asalaolao Aqaa-Mntrnyaasa AiNa vyaajaÜi> naavaacao AlaMkarhI Aazvatat. kÜNaI
%yaacao qaÜDo spYTIkrNa AiNa ]dahrNa do} Xakola kaÆ
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Natya - ithe wach re baLa!
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Asami
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| | Monday, August 19, 2002 - 2:58 pm: |
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Vyajokti : "Ha Leki Bole Sune laage " hya parkarcha alankaar aahe. ekhadyala nakalatpane kinva etar pratimecha vapar karun kahi aaikavane.
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Smk
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| | Wednesday, November 13, 2002 - 8:30 pm: |
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$baa yaa kavyap`karaba_la kÜNaI maaihtI do} Xakola kaÆ
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Giriraj
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| | Saturday, June 12, 2004 - 8:17 am: |
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ismataÊÉbaa maQyao caar AÜLI Asatat..pNa hI caarÜLI navho...
pihlya dusaáyaa AaiNa caÝqyaa AÜLIlaa ekaca yamakaMt baaMQalaolao Asato.. %yaamauLo Ébaacaa form A,A,B,A Asaa yaotÜ..pihlyaa tIna AÜLIMt eKadI klpnaa fulaivalaI jaato AaiNa XaovaTcyaa AÜLIt itlaa naaT\yamayair%yaa
pUNa-%vaasa naotat..
AÜmaar Kyyaama yaa piXa-yana Xas~&saaihtIka ha kavyap`kar laÜkip`ya kolaa.. saumaaro 1000 vaYaa-MpuvaI-
%yaaMnaI ÔarsaIt ilaihlaolyaa ÉbaaMcaa Anaok BaaYaaMt Anauvaad Jaalaolaa Aaho...
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Smk
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| | Monday, June 14, 2004 - 5:22 pm: |
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igarIÊ Qanyavaad. ]dahrNa do} XakXaIla kaÆ
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Vaatsaru
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| | Tuesday, June 15, 2004 - 12:08 pm: |
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p<aI p<aI gaulaaba hÜ jaatI
hr klaI mahja ek #vaaba hÜ jaatI
tUnao DalaI naa maOkXaaM najaroM
varnaa Xabanama Xaraba hÜ jaatI
hI pMkja ]Qaasa cyaa laa iplaado saaikyaa cyaa AaQaIcaI Ébaa Aaho
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Giriraj
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| | Tuesday, June 15, 2004 - 1:42 pm: |
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maoro jaInao ko ilayao tora Armaana hI kaÔI hOÊ
idla kI klama sao ilaKI ek dastana hI kaÔI hOÊ
tIrÜtlavaar kI tuJao @yaa ja,Ért Êeo naaja,naIMÊ
k,%la krnao ko ilayao ek mauskana hI kaÔI hO
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Milindaa
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| | Tuesday, June 15, 2004 - 4:16 pm: |
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pihlya dusaáyaa AaiNa itsayaa- AÜLIlaa ekaca yamakaMt baaMQalaolao Asato <<< igarIÊ yaoqao pihlyaaÊ dusaáyaa AaiNa caÝqyaa AÜLIlaa... Asao paihjao ka Æ
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Giriraj
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| | Tuesday, June 15, 2004 - 5:12 pm: |
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AÜhÜ.... galtI sao imaYTok hÜ gayaa²
to pihlyaaÊdusaáyaa AaiNa cavaqyaa AsaMca Aaho.... Qanyavaad imalaInda²
maa^DroTr Aahot ka kuNaI... maaJyaa 12 jaUnacyaa post maQaIla itsayaa- caM cavaqyaa k$na imaLola kaÆ
Qanyavaad²
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Smk
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| | Tuesday, June 15, 2004 - 7:13 pm: |
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vaaÊ Cana Aahot ]dahrNaM. marazIt Ébaayaa Aahot kaÆ
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Giriraj : done ..
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Giriraj
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| | Wednesday, June 16, 2004 - 6:09 pm: |
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Qanyavaad²
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Rar
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| | Wednesday, June 16, 2004 - 6:16 pm: |
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marazImaQao $baayaa mhNalao kI caTkna Aazvatat %yaa ra^ya ikNaIkraMcyaa rcanaa²
smk, ra^ya ikNaIkraMcyaa bb var jaa...baáyaaca vaacaayalaa imaLtIla.
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Smk
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| | Thursday, June 17, 2004 - 12:16 pm: |
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Rar Anaok AaBaar.. ..
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malaa vaaTto maaQava jyauilayanaanaI kahI Ébaayaa ilaihlyaa Aahot.
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Deemdu
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| | Wednesday, September 01, 2004 - 9:59 am: |
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mhatarI ]Dta nayaocaI itjalaaÊ maata madIyaa AXaI
kaMta kaya vadÜ navap`sava to saata idsaancaI tXaI
~at %yaa ]Bayaasa maI maja ivaQaI Gaatayaasa yaÜijatsao
hatamaajaI na`upa tuJyaa gavasalaÜÊ Aata kravao ksao
ho kuzlao va`u<a AhoÆÆÆÆ
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Shriramb
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| | Wednesday, September 01, 2004 - 2:04 pm: |
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XaadU-la ivaiËiDt
maasaajaasattaga yaoit gaNa ho XaadU-la ivaËIiDtI
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